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Poolside party by ilolamai Poolside party by ilolamai
Another picture on a hot summer day (38C).My body is full of sweat.

Program: SAI Paint Tool

Any critique is welcome(thank you anonymous for giving me 3 months membership)

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Critique by mmmmtasty13 May 3, 2012, 6:52:55 PM
Dear sir or madam this in truth is a wonderful picture but it has been done before. For me there no real pop no pazza for me the shading is good the hair could be more dynamic what i really do like about this picture is the level of detail in the background all of the skin looks like it has the same hues for every character i like the proportions on the ladies the are not blow out of proportion try making the focal point the lady in red bikini be more vibrant the colors the shading the expression ext
I do like this picture but it is average and i know you can do better
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Vision:

This is really really good. The anatomy is perfect, absolutely amazing. I like how there are so many people in the picture that it creates a scene and not just a lonely figure floating in space or something like that.

Originality:

Coming back to the fact that it's a bunch of people creates a feeling of scenery. I would have never thought to draw a picture like this, it surprises me.

Technique:

All I have to say is that the girl in front, the one wearing the red, her left eye is kind of floating off too far. It doesn't exactly fit the lineup of the face quite right. In fact, now that I think about it, they all do that to an extent. I guess manga is supposed to look like that, but try to be careful or it doesn't look right. Another thing is the shading. It's not as smooth as it could be, and it looks like someone painted it, which you did, but it takes away from the realism on the picture.

Impact:

The first word that came to my head when I saw this is: wow. Breath-taking. There is so much to look at, but it really isn't distracting. This picture blows my mind. Keep drawing art like this, as it is my inspiration. ^^
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Finlay12 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
What a sexy looking party!
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:iconilolamai:
ilolamai Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013
Hahaha.
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ru1995ben Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012
"My body is full of sweat*

*Looks down at lap*

Really?
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:iconilolamai:
ilolamai Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013
Hahaha.
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:iconrdfaf:
RDFAF Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012
I can die happy now.
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:iconilolamai:
ilolamai Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012
Hahaha.
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:iconrdfaf:
RDFAF Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012
Great work.
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Samurai-Poet Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very pretty!
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:iconilolamai:
ilolamai Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012
Thank you.
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Samurai-Poet Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome.
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Samurai-Poet Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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:iconxmoondark:
xmoondark Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012
Awesome
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:iconilolamai:
ilolamai Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
Thank you.
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:iconppshex:
ppshex Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
love this ><
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:iconilolamai:
ilolamai Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
I'm glad that you love it.
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:iconanimamomentlover:
animamomentlover Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
looks like a good party, :w00t:

:no: but i'm afraid i'm not invited

nice work on the detail
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:iconilolamai:
ilolamai Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
Thank you very much.
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:iconanimamomentlover:
animamomentlover Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
you are very much welcome
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:iconmikachusango:
MikachuSango Featured By Owner May 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love the one in the ponytail^^
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:iconilolamai:
ilolamai Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
I'm glad that you love her.
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MikachuSango Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yep^^
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ShojiAmasawa Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Professional General Artist
Do you need to be a girl to go? Or do you just need to be able to have a good time? Because I have a cold right now and I don't think I'd be very good company :(

NIce work!
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:iconilolamai:
ilolamai Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
You have to be a girl or you do waiter job.

Thank you.
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:iconhalanlore:
HalanLore Featured By Owner May 16, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Looks fun
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:iconilolamai:
ilolamai Featured By Owner May 17, 2012
Yes,it's fun.
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:iconcj-db:
CJ-DB Featured By Owner May 15, 2012   Traditional Artist
Great job and very pretty :love:
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:iconilolamai:
ilolamai Featured By Owner May 17, 2012
Thank you very much.
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:iconaoi-no-kokoro:
Aoi-no-Kokoro Featured By Owner May 12, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It's amazing. Great job!
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:iconilolamai:
ilolamai Featured By Owner May 17, 2012
Thank you very much.
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Prasadstudios Featured By Owner May 11, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
awesome
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ilolamai Featured By Owner May 17, 2012
Thank you.
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viceman Featured By Owner May 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
ว้าวๆๆๆๆๆ รูปนี้สุดยอดทุกคนเลยคร้าบ ชอบมากกกก <3

ร้อนนี้ถ้าได้แบบนี้มั่งก็ดีสิ XD
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ilolamai Featured By Owner May 17, 2012
ขอบคุณครับ สาวๆในไทยขี้อายไม่ค่อยใส่ชุดว่ายน้ำเท่าไหร่มั้ง
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saveme98 Featured By Owner May 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
The drawing is amazing!

but maybe if you brighten or tan the skin tones, it would be perfect. They just look a little too grey.
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ilolamai Featured By Owner May 17, 2012
Thank you.Thanks for your suggestion too.I will do that.
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saveme98 Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
;)
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EllyrythWindriver Featured By Owner May 6, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love the sense of activity/bustle so much of your work has. That makes it fun to really explore the drawings section by section. In this case, all those little splashing water droplets add to the effect, too, which is great ^_^
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ilolamai Featured By Owner May 17, 2012
Thank you very much.I'm glad that you love it.
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goshy11 Featured By Owner May 6, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
so awesome and i love the colors and shading
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:iconilolamai:
ilolamai Featured By Owner May 17, 2012
Thank you.I'm glad that you love it.
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goshy11 Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
im glad to XD
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Prophosphere Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
So many cute girl in here :iconhnnghplz:
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:iconilolamai:
ilolamai Featured By Owner May 17, 2012
Thank you.
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:iconcarrot25:
carrot25 Featured By Owner May 4, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is .... HEAVEN!!!!
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:iconilolamai:
ilolamai Featured By Owner May 17, 2012
Yes,it is^^
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:iconluchoevoluchon:
LuchoEvoluchon Featured By Owner May 4, 2012  Professional General Artist
this will be my paradise...XD...great job!!!
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:iconilolamai:
ilolamai Featured By Owner May 17, 2012
Hahaha.Thank you very much.
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StormFedeR Featured By Owner May 4, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
what can I say... ummm.. I smell a DD here. It should be! :meow:
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:iconilolamai:
ilolamai Featured By Owner May 17, 2012
Hahah.Thanks.But i just got DD last month.Still have to wait 3 months to get another one.
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StormFedeR Featured By Owner May 24, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
=D I guess I won't have one until I push myself into full detail :P but I'm too busy with my doujin for the moment :devilish:
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