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On a sunny day.

Program: SAI Paint Tool

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:iconkazenoken14:
Hello~ It's an honour writing a critique for you!
Though I'm not very good at art myself, I'd like to point and give out critiques.

First off, your concepts and ideas are wonderful, like always. The kawaii girls in the picture and the amazing detail you put into everything and not missing a single beat, whether it's the colour of the rocks, to the water, to shading, to clothing details. It is an amazing piece of art.

The reason I decided to critique this art in particular were because I was slightly annoyed of some things.

First off, the colours of the pictures seem a little dull, but when there are colours, it seems uncoordinated. Especially the girl in the background with the red dress. If she maybe had a darker green dress, with less 'shine' and shading, she'd pop out more, but this time I feel that she maybe even 'blends' in with the house. Other than the water, I don't feel that you gave anything a pop, not even the girl at the very front. I don't know why, but it seems almost like her hair is 3D, if you look carefully enough, especially that left fringe (on her POV) when it contrasts with her arm and the water.
That's the thing-- sometimes the art looks completely blended, everything! I can't find a meaning to the art and I can't find a specific interesting point.

Next is the water. The waves look extremely awkward and they don't look very real. There's a huge wave on the left side of the picture and an awkward bump where the girl is standing. In the large ocean, this could make sense. But in this picture, it seems like the water will splash out. There is no 'flow' in the water, just pretty blue colours. Plus, on the stairs the girls are sitting on, the length of the bottom stair is all the same. Water moves. Part of the staircase should be longer than another part of the stairs, to indicate there is moving water (especially in places where you drew the water 'bumps' and waves), do you get what I mean? This is hard to explain ^^;

Lastly, I disagree with the colours for the trees you used-- once again, they all look the same because the colours all seem dark and gloomy. From afar, forests look dark like how you drew on here, but the closer it is, the closer you can see the different colours for each tree and blush.

Is there such thing as over-shading? I wonder.

Other than that, you've once again created another masterpiece and the perspectives for the girls and the scenery is amazing-- if it's not too much, I'd like to see a more fun coloured art in the future! (Maybe this is why I cringe at my own art-- because I can't get anything right T^T)
Gambate~
-Scarlett

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Mood: Joy ~animamomentlover Dec 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i like your water colors with the light and dark blue with a hint of purple

it gives it quite the effect
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~Shane-Twilight Nov 13, 2012   Digital Artist
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:iconilolamai:
Thank you shane.
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~Shane-Twilight Nov 16, 2012   Digital Artist
Your Welcome! Please look through my gallery too!
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~danielsrzg Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
whoa
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Mood: Love ~carrot25 Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Is this a palace harem looks like? Or is this a heaven?
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:iconilolamai:
Just a normal palace.
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*Joakaha Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
^^
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